my Rock Opera

[sgt.null]

Tortured Artist

would someone please take a look at me!
TDCJ taught me to be all that I can be
I'm the whorish waitress, in the family restaurant
I'm the bait for the hatetress, is it too much to want?

to be noticed, for what I am, the only white man
being burned by the Clan, wrapped in an American flag

was it my all-over body tan? that makes it obvious,
that I'm oblivious, from jet lag, on vacation, on location
with my favorite hag, who loves me for who I am,
not for what he wants...

an older gentleman knows when to stop the hunt
- long enough to observe, something beautiful
in the wild, this feral child, into a man
watch me work, you unfeeling jerk, I'm a delicate genius


words - St. Francis

[sgt.null]

the Kingdom of Rats

this is how it ends...
I am sick of sunrises
and still feel the nitrous
like it was yesterday.
I am hollow and will
be my own hitman. she
locks the doors at night.
(my only gift to her)
how do you separate so
many years? divide which
belongs to you, which stays
with me. and every night
I can see you sleeping.
I should have thought
of this much earlier,
I never sat down and
watched the backyard before.


lyrics - Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Ozmi

Ozmi - you are cosmic - the cow becomes orgasmic
rated PG is a lie - one I'm not willing to tell
shooting her in the eye - much like William Tell

bionic, ionic, ironic - her parents are free
Elvis, his pelvis - making her see why he's famous
white boy rearranged us - borrow from the Godfather...

James Brown - has been cut up like meat
flipped, smothered - covered and scattered
not left empty-hatted - like us street musicians

in Austin - broken dream streams - there are no
quiet waters - 'til the street sweepers scream
- in the silence of their cabs - no sleep has made
mad - Ozmi is cosmic - without her - I'm not sad.

Lyrics - St. Francis

[sgt.null]

Milk - 9

put your feet on a rock
let me see your frock
when the cow goes moo
and I push it right through
let's go to your house
let's go to you room
if the door is locked
then you're ready to rock
don't be ashamed
'cause your daddy did the same

get off your lawn
and let me see that grass
if it's nice and round
let me hear that sound
go up to the roof
look down on the grass
and kick it to the curb
just don't be the last
don't be ashamed
'cause your daddy did the same


lyrics - Torres / Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Hot Water Slim (Reprise)

Hot Water Slim
Hot Water Slim
his name is not
Jim, Tim or even
Hank Pym!!!


Lyrics - Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Echo 145

The girl I used to know is dreaming, ‘bout Ol’ Saint Nick, toys and mistletoe.
and at school they can't keep little Enid from prayin', oh God please won't you bring my daddy home.

and the boy, he's sweet as an angel, you know he always does just what he's told, at night he's thinking, why'd you do it mama? God please don't let his precious heart turn cold.

and they're praying that I'll be home for Christmas, but me and mama both know that I won't. and she's wishin' that someone would have stopped her, from drinkin' and then picking up that phone.

now Slim, he'll be alright, you know me. folks like us we always do make do. up in here, we ain't cold and we ain't hungry. but missin' them is running me straight through.

don't you know it's her turn to miss me, when she lays down to sleep at night alone, when I leave here I won't return to Austin. Memphis I'm on my way to my new home.

well the lights don't shine as bright as their eyes. and the whiskey that I drink won't keep me warm. in the dark when those arms wrap around me, sweet whispers only chill me to the bone.

don't you know it's my turn to miss you, and all these women won't leave me alone. and they'll tell you that I don't even miss you. but all they want to do is wreck our home.

Lyrics - St. Francis

[Vraith]

I really don't want to interrupt your flow...maybe a mod will move this...but I have a couple important questions...
First...is this all somewhat in order of performance/story?
Second...
Who the hell are the characters? Who's singing what and why?
Third...
I've been reading along, and I need to know: Are you ever gonna link the music? Cuz I know...hell everyone familiar with musicals/operas knows...lyrics/music are co-dependent in the form. Well-mated, they can make up for SOME weaknesses in the other part and/or transcend the limits of both when synergy happens.
OTOH: Great lyrics won't save utter shit for music, nor great music rescue lyrical sewage.

[sgt.null]

Vraith - sorry I missed your reply.

page two of this thread has the running order.

most of the songs will be sung by Hot Water Slim with some exceptions.

Pink Cakes and Pretties - intro is by Captain Naughty.

the Gates songs will be sung by Sergeant Null. as will the Retrieve song. and the song Of.

Captain Naughty's Jugband Blues contains singing instructions.

Koala is sung by the Koala. as is Shower Buddy.

Some Whistle Blow is sung by Toro.as is Milk 9.

Denote is sung by Ali. as is Don't You Ever.

[sgt.null]

as to characters - so far...

Hot Water Slim - the protagonist. white inmate arrested on family violence charges. most of the story is seen through his eyes.

Suicide Bob - white inmate. self mutilator.

Sgt. Null - white officer. the counter point to Hot Water Slim.

Granny - white inmate. meth addict.

Captain Naughty - white inmate.

Koala - white inmate. sexual predator.

Ali - black inmate. jailhouse lawyer.

Tiny - Mexican American inmate.

Toro - Mexican American inmate. jailhouse balladeer.

Pimp Skinny - white inmate. 90 pound weakling.

Mother - Hot Water Slim's mother.

[sgt.null]

Mister Irresponsibility

they call him
mister irresponsibility
oh yeah! well ok!

he don't believe
in culpability
oh no! no way!

he blames it on
his instability
oh yeah! well ok!

Lyrics - Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Truck Stop

Cybil hold your water
Cybil hold your water

'cause he's a truck stop hooker
in his Rocky Mountain panties

'cause he's blowing hard
and going cheap
he's a real lot lizard
looking for a back door handout

Cybil hold your water
Cybil hold your water

Lyrics - St. Francis / Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Hot Water Slim (Slight Return)

he's the man they
call him Hot Water Slim
and I've spent my whole
life just following him

some say he's nothing
but a fraud
and the clown he
with is odd
he's one Yogi we all
can't bear

needs nothing but
opportunity and air
and he's living there
in Austin town
now the only way
for him is down

so don't you think
ever, that you're so
very clever - I run
circles around you

Lyrics - Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Go Granny Go

go granny - go granny
go granny go

coin slot - hot pot
loose slots - honey pot

go granny - go granny
go granny go

fry pan - tin can
tin pan - garbage can

go granny - go granny
go granny go

Lyrics - Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

Count Gate

breakups are a bitch
an obvious truth, dumb
enough to fall in love
I've been ditched, and
dumped and deserted
and denied so so many
times in the last dozen
years, my heart is now
beyond repair, you try
to numb yourself, you
try to dumb yourself,
you try to shrug it off,
laugh about it, cry about
it, you try - you try to
forget about it. you try
to fake it, and you try to
bury it. it doesn't matter,
it is still there an you are
still crushed, still dusted.

lyrics - Sgt. Null

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Bebop

I went down to the mountain
and I looked up to the sea
and all the little fishes,
wanted to bebop with me

my hole's got a bucket
my hole's got a bucket
my hole's got a bucket
and I can't buy no beer.


lyrics - Torres / Sgt. Null

[sgt.null]

I

the Killshots
Retrieve
Two Soups & a Mintstick
Mister Irresponsibility
Triptych

II

South Hall Gate
Pinkcakes & Pretties
Hot Water
Richard Behind the Glass
Alien Brain

III

Out of Place
Hot Water Slim (Slight Return)
Mr. Low's Restaurant
Center Gate
Captain Naughty's Jugband Blues

IV

Denote
Bebop / Count Gate
Koala
8 - This is the Correct Number of the Song
Go Granny Go

V

Some Whistle Blow
Yellow Pork Pie
Hot Water Slim (Reprise)
Granny's Lament
North Hall Gate

VI

She's Gone Sour
Of
8 - Pt. 2
Sanitized
Princess Turnkey

VII

Shower Buddy
Pinkcakes & Pretties Reprise / Leonardo Arredondo
Don't You Ever
Backgate
Bluebird

VIII

1/2 Way House
Strip Club
St. Francis Virus
Loving the Leper
Kingdom of Rats

IX

Tortured Artist
Ozmi
Milk - 9 / Truck Stop
Echo 145
Undercover