A tiny piece of the NaNoWriMo thing, from very early on. It won't make much sense out of context, and I'm posting it primarily to see what is made of it in comparison to my previous offerings by those who read them. It's a little unrefined due to the rapid nature of the NaNoWriMo process, but I'd still value opinions (whether or not you've read my piffling nonsense before).
So, here is the random brief excerpt:
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I am curious as to what NaNoWriMo is. Anyway, you need to break it up for easier reading by having a double space between the paragraphs. Or creating paragraphs. I have to say it contains some original elements: I like the soul concept alot and the immortality element was fabulous. Nice descriptions. You could elaborate on the dreams element, as it was not clear at the end. But then again, this is an element of a larger story.
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Yes, it is taken out of context from over 50,000 words of ongoing story.
I can answer your paragraph point and your NaNoWriMo query at the same time. NaNoWriMo is National Novel Writing Month (www.nanowrimo.org) and it entails writing a 50,000 word novel in the month of November. Lucimay started a topic on it, and a few of us took part. The aim is to free yourself of editing and backtracking, and just create. This tends to result in poor structure and lack of paragraphs
I can answer your paragraph point and your NaNoWriMo query at the same time. NaNoWriMo is National Novel Writing Month (www.nanowrimo.org) and it entails writing a 50,000 word novel in the month of November. Lucimay started a topic on it, and a few of us took part. The aim is to free yourself of editing and backtracking, and just create. This tends to result in poor structure and lack of paragraphs
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Very original. I like the concept but some of it needs work (not sure if blood and bile can coexist as the same concept), and there are a couple of errors. But I like it. Especially the way you use the body as a metaphor for the universe.
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[quote12dbb="Loremaster"]Very original. [/quote12dbb]
Thank you.
[quote12dbb="Loremaster"]I like the concept but some of it needs work (not sure if blood and bile can coexist as the same concept), and there are a couple of errors. [/quote12dbb]
Very true. My more...coherent...efforts are patchy and amateurish at best, and NaNo was more so as it was rushed (such is its nature). Still, despite my growing revulsion with most of my back catalogue, I thought posting some bits on here (and hopefully getting opinions) might motivate me to write again. I've been feeling hollow.
Thank you.
[quote12dbb="Loremaster"]I like the concept but some of it needs work (not sure if blood and bile can coexist as the same concept), and there are a couple of errors. [/quote12dbb]
Very true. My more...coherent...efforts are patchy and amateurish at best, and NaNo was more so as it was rushed (such is its nature). Still, despite my growing revulsion with most of my back catalogue, I thought posting some bits on here (and hopefully getting opinions) might motivate me to write again. I've been feeling hollow.