I just reread it myself. I remember enjoying it immensely decades ago when it first came out. Now I can recognize its worth, but I was really let down compared to my first reading. The problem is that the story is too short. For instance, the scene with Kodor, Damia, and Chrysalis is resolved much too easily.
In walks Ryzal to save the day. Yahoo. But why doesn't Kodor tell the mage that Damia is lying? For that matter, why doesn't Chrysalis? Why aren't both of these conspirators locked up so that there is no threat of the rebels at the Ascension scene?
I really like what SRD was
trying to do here. I like the main character, and how she determines to face her "fate," even though that might end in death or failure. I love how she uses her wits to play the little political games with the three monarchs, and how each monarch presents a separate, distinct "puzzle" for her to solve. I love the foreshadowing. I was completely fooled the first time around. I even like that she is rather plain looking--such a contrast with the end, and a contrast with his other female lead characters.
Yet, the Ascension scene puzzles me.
Why were the two mages fighting? If Brodwick was trying to keep Chrysalis from the stone seat with his wind, why was Scour resisting with his dragon image? Both parties wanted to keep her from reaching the chair. So why fight?
It seems like SRD just wanted more tension, a bigger climax. It served no other purpose.
Speaking of the Ascension scene, did anyone else think of
the Earthblood scene in FR, with Linden putting the Staff in the EB compared to Chrysalis putting the scepter to the Stone? Donaldson really likes these combination of powerful talismans.
It also seems that the author wasn't playing fair with us. The main character had knowledge that she wasn't sharing. The surprise at the end depended on this main character keeping knowledge from us, which is the equivalent of keeping knowledge from
herself, since she is presented here in 1st person. She has a hunch how all this will turn out, even the crucial element of the
scepter (which, if Ryzal hadn't thrown to her in the nick of time, or if she hadn't caught it in all that magical wind, the whole story would have been pointless; I hate when stories depend crucially on whimsical, trivial details like that).
Yet, she doesn't think about it once. She spends all this time worrying about her fate, but spends
no time whatsoever thinking about her deepest hope? No way. People aren't like that. She would have been going over her secret hope repeatedly, clinging to it to stave off fear. What is lacking here is the type of foreshadowing that Donaldson has later learned to achieve with Linden Avery in the second half of Fatal Revenant: putting clues to her final intentions right there in your face, but still keeping it hidden until the end.
I like this story as a study of SRD's writing. There is certainly some Terisa Morgan, Linden Avery, and Morn Hyland in Chrysalis. And there's quite a bit of Nick in Kodor. And some in Sorus in Damia. It's like Donaldson was practicing for these later tales, warming up for them. But it is definitely not on par with his longer works--despite what he says about a short story being like champagne to a novel's beer. This is no higher art form. He must be drinking the wrong beer.
