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Posted: Sat May 10, 2014 11:22 pm
by DrPaul
Vraith has inspired me to write the following:
I think that I shall never see
A poem lovely as a tree
But I have read, within this site,
A poem full of poop and shite.
Posted: Sun May 11, 2014 2:58 pm
by Vraith
DrPaul wrote:Vraith has inspired me to write the following:
I think that I shall never see
A poem lovely as a tree
But I have read, within this site,
A poem full of poop and shite.
Nice.
But really...someone mentioned "clench"...and I get that one [especially in first 2 series]...but it's the ordinary/dullness factor added to repetition that does it.
I mean...incondign I think was mentioned, and gelid.
Do what I said, replace them with "inappropriate" and "icy"...
inappropriate and icy become the new clench. Cuz they repeat AND are dull/add nothing to the feel/style/mood.
Posted: Mon May 12, 2014 12:16 am
by Dread Poet Jethro
"Incondign" strikes me
As a word that Sarge would use
While he was at work
Think on his workplace
And what he does while he's there
Then you will get it
I must admit, though
This is rather the other
End of the process...
Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2014 5:33 am
by Landwaster
"Despite"
... 'cause I got told off for using it the way he does, in school once (in the 1980s).
Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2014 6:37 am
by Fist and Faith
"Landwaster", because where the hell have you been??
Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2014 7:49 am
by Landwaster
Time passes a lot faster over there mate!
Posted: Wed Jul 09, 2014 9:43 am
by Fist and Faith
