Kevin's Watch

Time out!!! I'm calling a Foul!!!

Looks Like A Foul to me.

Eyes not "carious" enough.

His chin is not quite right...

In [u]The Power That Preserves[/u] was wrote:Lord Foul was essentially invisible, though he cast an impenetrable blankness in the air like the erect shadow of a man - a shadow of absence rather than presence which showed where he would have been if he had been physically corporeal - and around the shadow shone a penumbra of glistering green. ... When the gleaming green penumbra had shifted itself to face him, he saw the Despiser's eyes. They were the only part of Lord Foul that was visible within his aura. ... He had eyes like fangs, carious and yellow - fangs so vehement in malice that they froze Foamfollower's voice, gagging him on the encouragement he had tried to shout for Covenant's sake.

I thought it was a raver! LOL

You've parted his mist on the wrong side.
Looks good! Have you done Joan yet?

Better. But his eyes, while "like fangs" - carious (decayed) and yellow fangs - should actually be quite human looking. Remember, underneath he resembles a hale, aged man.

wayfriend wrote:Better. But his eyes, while "like fangs" - carious (decayed) and yellow fangs - should actually be quite human looking. Remember, underneath he resembles a hale, aged man.

Why should they be human looking?
That was his primary descriptive point.
Yellow fang-like eyes.
Even when he was forced/reduced to assume a human form his fanglike eyes remained.

hue of bone, those eyes are to round for me.

soft one wrote:You've parted his mist on the wrong side.

HAHAHAHA!!!!!

The mist is too uniform and static IMO, both at the surface and within. I always pictured it roiling on the inside and with snaky tendrils on the surface. With some kind of suggestion of pulsation that can be perceived even in a still picture.

High Lord Tolkien wrote:Why should they be human looking?
That was his primary descriptive point.
Yellow fang-like eyes.

I guess it's open to interpretation whether "eyes like fangs" means his eyes actually looked like teeth, or whether this is poetic imagery used to suggest that his eyes were very menacing.

Based on other Donaldson prose, such as, "A scowl knotted his forehead like a fist," I think we need to conclude that poetic imagery is always an option. The alternative is somewhat grotesque!

So let's be careful. Tolkien wrote "and the shadow about it reached out like two vast wings", and you know what THAT led to.

wayfriend wrote:

High Lord Tolkien wrote:Why should they be human looking?
That was his primary descriptive point.
Yellow fang-like eyes.

I guess it's open to interpretation whether "eyes like fangs" means his eyes actually looked like teeth, or whether this is poetic imagery used to suggest that his eyes were very menacing.

Based on other Donaldson prose, such as, "A scowl knotted his forehead like a fist," I think we need to conclude that poetic imagery is always an option. The alternative is somewhat grotesque!

So let's be careful. Tolkien wrote "and the shadow about it reached out like two vast wings", and you know what THAT led to.

LOL!
I was thinking that as I wrote it.

I think there's a big difference between a colorful phrase like "A scowl knotted his forehead like a fist," and the (to me) straightforward "His eyes were like fangs."

"His eyes were like fangs" always meant to me that he could hold you with his eyes like a predator would do with its fangs - an impaling and hypnotizing look.

Now THATS what I,m talkin' bout !!!!!!!!!!

I've always imagined his eyes were like a rattlesnakes.

hey man..it looks great... only one feature missing from the eyes...

heres the only quote I could find about Fouls Eyes...from Wounded Land.

"The worshipper with the knife sank to his knees, cried out in exaltation, "Master!"
The figure's eyes were like fangs, carious and yellow; and they raged venomously out of the flames."

put a couple fangs in the middle of the yellow of his eyes and you nailed it..

keep it up.

and some comments made above... i guess it is open to interpretation ... I suppose depending how you view it , Fouls eyes could have been two fangs hanging in the middle... rather than having human shaped outline.. Personally I picture it as someone else mentioned... Like a Rattlesnake but more menacing.

Good job. and dont let criticism discourage you. your work keeps getting better and better. I like your new Avatar too...

I've never imagined 'like fangs' as meaning actually fang shaped or containing anything toothy. I read that type of description as more of an impression - i.e. the eyes give an onlooker the sense of having fangs bared at them; the eyes are vicious, hostile, possibly venomous.