Kevin's Watch

Announcement: This has been removed in my great purge of 31/8/05. I may send any or all of these to genre publications, and I don't want any issues because they're available here for free.

i liked it. and some of the words are new to me, which I also like.

That's some good writing there. Impressive, actually - far better prose than anything I could do, at least.

Should stop underestimating yourself bro.

I like it too by the way Cj. Curious though if you've ever tried to keep up that depth of descriptiveness in a longer piece though? Personally, I can't do novel type stuff, find the effort too much, and consistency very difficult, especially when trying to maintain those sort of descriptions.

--Avatar

I agree, I find it very difficult to sustain anything like that, though I have tried. I suppose the way I write could be likened to magnesium in a flame; it burns brightly but briefly, then is gone. When I made the attempt, I basically wrote each chapter as an individual short piece; it seemed easier that way.

Murrin: Avatar is quite right, don't sell yourself short. You write well, and I look forward to reading more of your work

In any case, I shouldn't take too much of the limelight here; it's basically a transcript of part of a recent dream, though of course the way I've conveyed it is mine.

Anyway, thank you all. It means a lot to me when people enjoy something I've written.

I know I write well, but I also know that I can't write with the kind of evocative imagery you have here. Different styles - and it just happens you write in a style I prefer over the style of my own writing.

CovenantJr wrote:I agree, I find it very difficult to sustain anything like that, though I have tried...I basically wrote each chapter as an individual short piece; it seemed easier that way.

Yeah, that makes sense. Then it's just a case of editing them together, which is probably easier than trying to maintain such a strongly descriptive flow over long pieces.

--A

Cov wrote:the chill breeze seeming as the soul of the derelict whispering around my ears and drawing me in

Cov wrote:the windows seem to reach for me with vacant mouths.

Cov wrote:The sky is unappealing in its mottled grey, but unthreatening in its lack of life.

These, without doubt, are the gems of your excellent story. You are very talented at evoking atmosphere and emotions.