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Poem, but then i put a bit of covenant in there

Posted: Thu Jun 09, 2005 1:05 pm
by Rincewind
They stand like silent sentinels

Spread sporadically, an organic pattern inconcievable to human thought

Their benign presence threatened by a movement to their decimation

The covering inures them to natural hazards, and those undirected

But this man, he represents a hate they can not stand against

Sentinels no more, they are but diminutive remnants of their former grandeur

"And the glory of the earth becomes less than it was"


if you find the wording odd, its because i had a list of words i had to use some from, despite that though, i was thinking of the ravers and the forest the whole time

and the inconcievable to human thought thing is a direct referance to revelstone and the giants

so whaddya think?

Posted: Thu Jun 09, 2005 1:16 pm
by Avatar
Not too bad at all. I especially like the second line.

Could do without the "They" "Their" etc. in my opinion, but an opinion is all it is. ;)

--Avatar

Posted: Fri Jun 10, 2005 12:23 am
by dennisrwood
i like as well. nice start.

Avatar: i agree could start...

"standing like silent..."