Of Despite and Ravers

Post by **spacemonkey** » Sun Sep 17, 2006 6:20 am

Firstly, I will warn all,this piece is DARK. I make no excuses for the title,or what's contained therein. This was a musing one evening when a lot of things went really bad on me for a week or so..... ENJOY!(I hope.Maybe nobody will run off screaming.....)

OF DESPITE AND RAVERS

The darkness rises
The darkness wishes to feed
Consuming all
A lust gluttony of blood,lifeforces darkness needs

Power unbidden
A mere thought destroys
Your life nothing
Your pleas and cries-mere toys

So the change has come
The mind expands,strength swells
It's time to feed
It's yours,momentarily,the blood that quells

A thirst that never slakes
A small injury,scarcely noted
The ecstacy in return
Denies nothing,sheer pleasure as your life drips away

Evil,evil come inside
Evil,evil I've nothing to hide
Screaming inside,trying to warn others
Death's here,Death's inside

Immortal,unbreakable
Your struggles nothing
My mind breaking,unstable
Blood runs pure,Blood that stings

Cells changing,senses preternatural
A perfect killer
Hunter,so you're mine
Pass,pass quickly lest you die next

Time my enemy
Brief years with whom to share?
I'm the dead
Yet,I walk,I breathe

Lust not the same
The ultimate high,the initial bite
The life,the memories,the Loves
Pour into me whilst I draw the blood

The grave was robbed of it's meal
Worms feed not on this flesh
Feed on the guilty,innocent--no matter
The gift mine from the living I steal

Power mine
Your prayers,incantations--ignored
Who are you to judge?
Preach not,Evils abound--transgressions stored

Lie or Kill
What's the difference?..............................

spacemonkey.......2006

As I stated,DARK, yes as you see I was having a REALLY BAD TIME!I'm not too sure where this emerged from,what needed expressed that day,but when this was written,I felt a little better........for a while.

Further,I'm my own worst judge,what do you guys think??

Post by **sgt.null** » Mon Sep 18, 2006 2:57 am

yes dark. but not all poems need be about trees and puppies. but i would either keep with the rhyme scheme or ditch it all together. (you can tell i favor the ditch)
if you go free form, then you can open it up some, play around and stagger some lines... tweak the form.

Post by **spacemonkey** » Tue Sep 19, 2006 4:40 am

Thanx for the advice sgtnull,will listen to an accomplished poet himself.....

Post by **sgt.null** » Tue Sep 19, 2006 3:42 pm

thanks, but hardly accomplished. i scribble some...

Post by **spacemonkey** » Wed Sep 20, 2006 12:52 am

sgtnull wrote:thanks, but hardly accomplished. i scribble some...

Hey you scribble better than I!!*Grins*

Post by **sgt.null** » Wed Sep 20, 2006 5:29 am

thanks. I think I have at least one sale now.

Post by **spacemonkey** » Sat Sep 23, 2006 4:05 am

yep, when ya getting it published?????

Post by **spacemonkey** » Wed Oct 25, 2006 4:35 am

Another one:
Lost Within

steel tastes cold
oily

only a mere moment away
tears would
no longer come
i no longer
care
pressure mounts
almost there
i have sat
nowhere
in this incipient madness
blankly staring
at all who have
gone before
the bodies are
numerous
screams unbearable
yet this is
my inheritance
my place
my lucid insanity
a squeeze is all
and i will join
the sea of those
who cry out in pain
whose plight is no better
no worse
than mine
"Please don't,please stop
this place is not yours
nor is it mine"
a touch is all
i feel brushing my streaked face
"Lift up your eyes,
see me for who I am"
dumbly i comply
Seraphim
Angel
breath taking beauty
who sheds tears
with i
"Come with me,
see what you have missed,
see what you can have again"
staring blindly i return to the
incipient madness
that is mine
her cries were not like
those below
hers was sorrow
of unbearable loss
my tears were no more
a hand was all
another touch
that reached through
pulling gently away
the destruction in my hand
i wanted to end
no further i begged
the steel she took
and kissed the pain
"Life is yours
come with me
away from lucid nightmares"
only if you stay with me
here nowhere
on this edge
the pistol she takes
and the kisses
she gave
lifted mine eyes
to where she flies
to where she laughed
most of all where
she loved.............................

Post by **Wyldewode** » Wed Oct 25, 2006 5:05 am

I like the free form, and the imagery. Keep writing, anf keep writing from the heart.

Post by **sgt.null** » Wed Oct 25, 2006 5:44 am

yes, i prefer the free form.
keep producing!

Post by **Gil galad** » Wed Oct 25, 2006 9:36 am

Very nice!!!

I like

Post by **spacemonkey** » Sat Oct 28, 2006 2:17 am

Thanx everybody, that one has been rattling in my head for some time. Finally I set it down here, many more to go............

Kevin's Watch

Kevin's Watch

Of Despite and Ravers

Of Despite and Ravers