My Poems

[lucimay]

pay no attention to him, iQ.

second is better.

it got me in the gut.

[iQuestor]

Hate to say this IQ but I preferred the original

Hey guy! what exactly did you not like about the second one? thanks!!

[Dreamscape]

Great!

[iQuestor]

thanks Dreamscape!

[Seareach]

Oooh...when did you write this one?

Fever dreams

What fever'd dreams has she awoke?
what tortured love have I bespoke?
Ebon Mane'd and eyes of frost,
she spake at me, my soul was lost.

she took me to her chamber-lair,
with silken bonds she kept me there.
in carnal bliss did we abide;
for hours or years I can't decide.

she free'd me then, an empty shell,
kissed me thrice and bade me well;
loosed my bonds and walked away.
where she's gone, I cannot say.

What fever'd dreams has she awoke?
what tortured love have I bespoke?
I dreamt her on some distant shore;
from here I'll love her, e'er more.

I can't remember seeing it before. I love it!

[Mortice Root]

iQuestor-
I know nothing about poetry, but I know when something "hits" me. "Fever Dreams" and "The Burn Pile" were great! I really liked the almost archaic wording in "Fever Dreams", very nice! With "Burn Pile" I was totally caught off guard by the last stanza. I was reading along, in a pleasant remembrance kind of mood, then the last stanza really changed the whole tone from slightly melacholoy to almost heartbreakingly sad. Very nice.

The others were good too, but those two really grabbed me. Thanks for sharing.

[iQuestor]

Sea: I wrote this this past summer. It is to be included in the Kevins Watch Anthology. Thanks so much for reading it


Mortice, thanks for your comments. they made my day.

[Mortice Root]

You're welcome. Anytime.

[iQuestor]

bump in anticipation of KeWaPoMo or however it is LM spells it....