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Truth To Tell

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Truth To Tell

When I tell her the truth
I'll be calm and reasonable - and maybe a bit detached.
She'll listen, and then analyze my words discreetly -
Apply logic and make a considered response,
And we'll have a civilised conversation.

When I tell her the truth
It wll be in anger, free of all restraint.
Our words will blaze like fire and passion,
Burning with the raw flame of naked candor
Till only ash remains.

When I tell her the truth
I'll say it flippantly, as if joking,
And I'll watch from the corner of my eye for her reaction.
She'll see me watching,and know my true intention,
But we'll both laugh wittily, mocking our emotions.

If I tell her the truth
I'll hide it in careful lies.
All masters of fiction will envy my practised skills.
She'll believe the truth - as I present it to her;
I'll almost deceive myself.

But when she tells me the truth
She'll do so without speaking a word.
She'll avoid my look, as if our gazes were polarised;
My body will forget her touch.
A thousand words, unspoken, will echo in a crashing silence.
I will be voiceless, and alone.
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Post by Avatar »

:) I like it. Especially the third stanza.

The truth is a strange beast. Poison or sustenance depending on so many things.

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Post by Gadget nee Jemcheeta »

It had an effect on me that was considerable enough that I felt uncomfortable reading it at work. So way to go, definately powerful for anyone who knows the sorts of situations you're talking about.
That last stanza, yeah, that hit pretty hard. :)
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Post by Fist and Faith »

Nice, Edge! Good job of capturing many of the games we play.
All lies and jest
Still a man hears what he wants to hear
And disregards the rest
-Paul Simon

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Post by Gadget nee Jemcheeta »

Yeah, I just read that again, and I want to reiterate how powerful I thought this was. The feelings that I've gone through in association with the last stanza hit me like a punch to the gut when I read it. Totally represented the idea very well, with few words. Congrats again.
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Post by Cate »

Edge, ..........awesome, like everything else you do.
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Post by CovenantJr »

The third and fourth resonated most with me, but the last was also remarkably well written.
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